I decided to take a break, kind of tired but wanted to post this up and ask if you think this setting works.
Now if it sucks, or is not enough, or too much, please tell me. Don’t worry about my feelings; it is more important to learn what works and what doesn't. In my head I already see this, so it will help to get an idea if you can see what I am seeing. Or even if you like it…
"The mass of students worked their way to the ships, under the rapidly fading light. The sun sat half swallowed by the expanse of the ocean. Scattered clouds absorbed the orange glow and appeared to dance like flames in the purple tinged sky. Long shadows of palm trees stretched across the half sand, half grass landscape. The wind gently blew on his neck sending chills erupting in Goosebumps down his back."
I already talked about the ships and where they were and what they looked like. Also I tried to edit this but I am seeing cross eyed, so plz forgive me if there are a lot of mistakes… I know it is hard to judge with it being right in the middle of a subject, but i didn't want to post the whole page. Maybe i should have, either way do your best.
One other question if you wouldn’t mind answering.
My book is set during the Middle Ages, yet I wonder how I should use the dialoged. Such as what kind of terminology I should use for Time, weights and measurements or how true to the area I should be, as far as language or dialect?
I feel I should use semi modern terminology, or commonly used words to help the reader understand or connect to the book easier. What do you think?
Like using hours and minutes instead of sun dials or scaphe dial.
Or measurement in feet and miles instead of digits, stadion, cubit and Schoinion.
You get the idea.
Thx for your time.