I would like you to read my first page, plz tear it apart. Let me know what you think, is it good or bad? and plz don't spare my feelings.
I know the grammar needs help, I am still learning that part. My wife takes care of that edit for me. But to get an idea of my first page by other people; will help me decide what works with other pages that I am going to write.
If you don't mind plz answer these questions after any comment you want to leave besides these.
1: did the start intrigue you, or was it confusing?
2: did reading the first page make you want to read the second one?
3: did it read easy or did it seem choppy?
4: plz rate it 1 - 10 10 being the highest. (remember my feeling can't be hurt)
Thx for your time and support. This will help more than you know. Well here it is.
Thx for your time.