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Thank you all. The advice from last time paid off BIG TIME!


I really appreciate all the advice you give me. It has helped me see flaws, overcome fears, enhance the feel of my work, and best of all—it made my story stronger.

Give this page a read if you will. It means a lot to get this just right, this scene should make you sit up and take notice.

If you don't want to give an in-depth answer, just say: poor, good, or great... or: I would stop reading, or: I might turn the page, or: I would definitely turn the page.


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Catchy Name

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I need a catchy name for the military academy my MC attends. Any ideas will help, so far the best I can come up with is: Brunswick Military Academy.


I want something bold, yet rolls off the tong… any thoughts?

Any comment you might leave will be appreciated... thx for your time.

Revised First Page critique…

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Revised First Page critique… thx to all the great points, I feel it has moved in the right direction. I thank each and every one of you for leaving a comment. If you haven’t read the post before this one (First page critic) plz read that one first before leaving a comment, and tell me if you agree, that this version is better and follows the subject or focus the reader attention better.


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REMOVED... THX again to all those poeple that left a comment.

First page critic

I just sent my first page (250 words) to a few blogs for a critic; I figured I should offer my revised first page up here as well… so if you want, read it and tell me what you think. Thx for your time and effort, all advice is welcome.


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REMOVED... thx for all the advice.

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What spurs you onward—as a writer—to keep going despite the odds of ever making it? (Besides the common answer—I’m a writer I have to write—I think I’ll go deeper. I write to inspire my kids, and impress my wife, if I can write a book she loves then it’s all worth it.)

If you could give up would you? (I have thought about it, and even tried, but I found out I can’t. and 2 years later, I now know I’ll never quite regardless of the outcome.)

How do you separate yourself from your work? (Still working on this one, so far, I can’t.)

Do you let the weather, stress, family tension or any other outside force affect your writing? (Yes, I do, I often use it to fuel my work… let’s just hope it even out in the end.)

If you could change one negative thing about your writing what would it be? (My use of the English language, more specifically my use of syntax, I struggle to make sentences fit, and flow the way they should in a novel… the way they should flow so the words fad and my world jumps off the page.)

I probably wouldn't be writing if computers and word processors didn’t exist… they are a necessity for me.

Thx for all the wonderful advice, and encouragement… any comment you might leave will not go unread or un-responded to.

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Give this a read.

Thx for stopping by, give this a read, and tell me what you think… good or bad I want to know what you think. It is choppy, could you visualize it?


It has some violence… blood and killing, so if that stuff bothers you—you might not want to read this.

REMOVED... thx for those who left comments.

Update

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My first draft after a few tweaks is 100% complete, (thank the light) and my daughter is in the process of editing it. She is a blessing. Her formidable knowledge of English, and use of syntax, has dramatically improved my work.

I’m looking for a few people (that don’t know me personally and can give honest feedback) to critic my book, so if you’re interested let me know, via email or comment here.

It might be six months before its ready to go out; I still need to send it to Shakespeare, after my daughter is finished.

My next story revolves around a solar system that has six inhabitable planets, with six varying races, all vying for control. Soon, an outside force—a more advanced race-- is looking to conquer their planets and invades. The remnants of the six planets converge on the human planet, to make one last stand. A young prince and his wife, must find away to bring these races together, and learn the secret of beating the force or all will be lost.

That’s the gist of it, who knows where it will lead.

Thx for stopping by, any feedback will not fall on deft ears.

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I’ve sure missed you all…

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It’s been awhile, I am trying to catch up on all your blogs, thx for sticking around through my non-internet-access days.

Here is a quick question: having a love interest in a book, help you -as a reader- feel more attached to the character, or story?

Please share how you have been and how your WIP is going, anything I can do to help?



Thx for stopping by and lending me your support.

What up?

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How have you all been—good I hope.


How is your WIP going?

When you write, do you plan out chapter length ahead of time; or do you go back after the first draft, and make-up chapters then?

Have you read any good books lately?

Thx for stopping by, you make my day much brighter.

Glad you stopped by...

How is everyone? Good I hope!


How is your WIP progressing? (You know how mine is going.)

When you write, do you picture characters ahead of time, or let them wonder into your mind during creation? (I don’t plan a thing, especially how a character looks like or what they’ll do.)

Without question, there has to be “telling” in a book… it can’t all be showing. How do you keep telling short and sweet—not to mention intriguing? (I really struggle with this one: not the intriguing part-I hope-but with the right amount.)

Thx for stopping by and any comment you might leave.