Sorry all, I’ve been out of town with very sporadic internet access.
My revisions are progressing (very slowly) but I feel at peace with my work… at least for now.
Please read this, and tell me what you think.
Set up: the battle against the magical realm has taken a turn for the worse; horrible creatures have breached the cities walls. Tristan is running home to find his mother and get her safely out of the city, an order he neglected to do earlier. (The creatures have been adequately described on previous pages.)
REMOVED... Thx for your input.