tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7079424739175991097.post6724739340406774522..comments2023-10-22T03:26:52.715-07:00Comments on Authors' Union: Revised first pageJeff Kinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00667419764890599092noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7079424739175991097.post-24233979624100434022010-02-02T07:42:45.996-08:002010-02-02T07:42:45.996-08:00There were are few sentences that didn't seem ...There were are few sentences that didn't seem to flow. I think it had much to do with the punctuation and some minor grammar issues. I am very interested in the story thought and would turn the page.sundcarriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00866482585240648400noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7079424739175991097.post-77985644994628490292010-01-31T19:18:37.200-08:002010-01-31T19:18:37.200-08:00Thx so much... and yes I am STILL a baby when it c...Thx so much... and yes I am STILL a baby when it comes to punctuations/ grammar. You can bet I will ask for your help once I get a full manuscript for you to edit Shakes. Hopefully by then I am better and make your job easier.<br />I am going to send an email later asking you a few questions on the whole editing process. <br />Thx for your time all. It helps so much, maybe ill post the second page. Thx again.Jeff Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667419764890599092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7079424739175991097.post-54782313691105434002010-01-31T16:09:02.626-08:002010-01-31T16:09:02.626-08:00I like it! It's interesting, dynamic, and defi...I like it! It's interesting, dynamic, and definitely caught my interest enough that I would want to continue reading.<br /><br />As mentioned before, there were a few problems with punctuation/grammar. Also, when you used the word "synched," I believe it should be cinched.<br /><br />I'd love to read more! ♥Wrae Annhttp://www.wraeann.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7079424739175991097.post-78822414749511074782010-01-31T15:53:01.189-08:002010-01-31T15:53:01.189-08:00Okay, I didn't read the first version (I'v...Okay, I didn't read the first version (I've been desperately writing syllabi for my classes starting in March!), but this is pretty dramatic so far. I could definitely see continuing to read--no reason not to.<br /><br />Grammar is another thing... lots of tweaking needed... but I expect you will give me a crack at it some day, or at least let me show you what I'm capable of as an editor? <br /><br />Keep writing/revising!Dr. Cheryl Carvajalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15323455180953109460noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7079424739175991097.post-50241988765894584762010-01-31T12:53:29.446-08:002010-01-31T12:53:29.446-08:00thx i'll keep working on it.thx i'll keep working on it.Jeff Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667419764890599092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7079424739175991097.post-3083000808862250252010-01-31T12:45:42.856-08:002010-01-31T12:45:42.856-08:00You still have some of the same issues as before, ...You still have some of the same issues as before, but I think it does flow better and the last paragraph worked for me much better, with a more profound (for me) hint of the real situation.Stephanie Barrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17772217449161603561noreply@blogger.com